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PS Feedback
« on: October 18, 2008, 01:01:51 pm »
Any and all feedback about the PS is highly appreciated, be it suggestions for additions/alterations or simple errata. The 'owner' of the PS also has the option of expanding upon his PS if he fancies it - subject to DM approval of course.
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #1 on: October 28, 2008, 12:56:16 pm »
Feedback largely nonexistent...not a good sign...
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #2 on: October 28, 2008, 03:27:22 pm »
Mostly I see grammer errors.

PS - SM
Numerous NPC show levels, unlike many of the other PS's

PS - KoH
Regent Section -- shouldn't give the levels of Sir Guy Nichalier.
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #3 on: October 28, 2008, 05:06:32 pm »
Thanks Alan!
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #4 on: October 29, 2008, 12:40:24 am »
Sorry Bjorn, still getting over the whole 'destroy all unbelievers and dominate all Cerila bwahahaha' minor objective :o .

I'll try and add some more NPC's soon and maybe do some short stories.  So far I'm on a 'what is written, is written, what is reality is for you to discover' approach to the PS...
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #5 on: October 29, 2008, 01:57:22 am »
PS of ETN
Page 2, "The High Scribe's Report", paragraph 1.
2nd sentence, "I response" -- "In response"

Sentence 3, "The temple remains strong, but there is much suffering in the world,..."

Page 3, Ln 35 -- "Recent History" (which needs to be capitalized); "She was not the most senior priest, but she was acceptable to all the major factions (more than faction was hoping to control the ETN through her, but in this they were disappointed).

More later...
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #6 on: October 29, 2008, 09:24:44 am »
...my typos are legend...me thinks I should hire an editor...
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #7 on: October 29, 2008, 10:00:03 am »

4 GB's to Medoere per editing, and i'm your man  ;D

But seriously, it doesn't bother me. I am in constant awe at the amount you write, so i can manage to overlook typos. Usually it doesn't garble the passage out so much, that i don't understand it.
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #8 on: October 29, 2008, 04:59:30 pm »
*read's major and minor objectives*

*falls off chair*

Oh.... now those ARE challanges....
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #9 on: October 29, 2008, 05:13:24 pm »
(more than faction was hoping to control the ETN through her, but in this they were disappointed).

more than one faction?
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #10 on: October 29, 2008, 11:00:41 pm »
*read's major and minor objectives*

*falls off chair*

Oh.... now those ARE challanges....

Remember, your loyal followers - those people behind you with the big sticks - expect you to fulfill the objectives of the domain - be tardy and receive their righteous wrath...

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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #11 on: October 29, 2008, 11:11:16 pm »
See, I look at them less as goals but Divine Manifest Destinies that need to be filled.  ;D
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #12 on: October 30, 2008, 01:33:56 am »
*read's major and minor objectives*

*falls off chair*

Oh.... now those ARE challanges....

I don't even have to know my agendas, to know that they will be totally meglomanical.  Such is how it goes in RoE.
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #13 on: November 07, 2008, 06:55:40 pm »
Thanks for the feedback.

For your information - work on PSs have been temporarily halted as I struggle with a major revision of the P&H...its hard work, but surprisingly fun. I think this will be very, very good  :)
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Re: PS Feedback
« Reply #14 on: November 08, 2008, 07:16:52 pm »
This may be an dumb question, but what is the P & H? I've been trying to figure ot out for ten minutes before finally throwing in the towle and asking.  ???

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